The weekly challenge on Lily Child's Feardom blog called for no more than 100 words that included the three words below.
The throne of a mighty civilization sat empty. Its owner long dead and buried. Intrusive and insistent, Mother Nature reclaimed the tumbled walls hiding Doom once again to await the next fool who felt an urge to overcome her.
The Re-write - 40 words
The throne of a once mighty civilization sat empty, its owner long dead and buried. Intrusive and insistent, Mother Nature reclaimed the tumbled walls hiding Doom once again to await the next fool who felt an urge to challenge her.
Now that I have some serious time trying to master these Flash challenges, I have concluded that to do it well, the words just have to be there when I open up my brain. Thinking too hard about the challenge and whatever the prompt might be tends to make me tense and more likely to flounder than if I just begin writing. Come up with a starting sentence and go where it points me.
In addition I find that if I mess with the final product too much, I end up diluting the original idea, or worse, I lose it all together. The above example is what I am talking about. My re-write does not take away from what I was saying to begin with , but by just changing a word, adding another, and cleaning up some minor punctuation mistakes, I made it a better piece.
Whether this is of any use to anyone else but me is up to anyone else but me.